See mum,
Snow is falling to the floor
I really hope that there is more
The snow is cold but oh so great
No school tomorrow it must be fate
We’ll have snowball fights all day long
No work or lessons this can’t go wrong
This cold snow day is just so fun,
I really do not miss the sun!
My friend help me on this poem.
July 8, 2013 at 10:24 am
I think kadeces poem is good because he has used commas and exclamation marks to improve I think you should use key elements like alliteration, metaphors and personification
July 8, 2013 at 10:30 am
I like how you’ve wrote the poem about no school and how you have used rhyming though out the whole poem, but by doing this you have end up not using some of the other poetic devices.
July 8, 2013 at 10:36 am
Thanks tyreece for telling me about my poem