Satire

I’m writing to tell you that I’m a new boy at London Nautical.
London Nautical is one of most  beautiful schools  in London. The inside is  falling apart in summer with the natural holes cooling down the students. Home of idiots are fighting everyday on our shiny  football pitch – hold on, our school can’t afford one.

However we barely have P.E equipment for our lessons . whiles  jumping on coach’s  to go to play sports when other schools  laugh as we walk pass. Teacher must think that we are they children on the good side where on of the best in Lambeth at sports . The class is so clean you can eat the chewing gum of the bottom of table. The playground has a hole for swimming in the summer time with clean water you can drink  from. The teacher car some much that the car park is empty by 3:30 .  The floor so clean that student slip and brake the legs.


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3 responses to “Satire”

  1. ramonegarraway Avatar
    ramonegarraway

    In your piece of work I like the way how you have structured your wor, to improve I think you should read over your work and improve it in certain areas.

  2. kadece Avatar
    kadece

    sir could you tell whats wrong or if these mistakes so i can improve

    1. Christopher Waugh Avatar

      It’s going well, Kadece. I’ve identified in red all the words or phrases that still have a mistake in them. Often it’s a slight mis-spelling or a situation where you’ve missed an s from a plural.

      Let me know if you need more help.

      CW

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